Translation Check by Chrouya
Script: Dog Days' 04 [timed - Stefl1504][tmp for Chrouya].ass
Workraw: Dog Days' - 04 480 AAC.mkv

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#Line Number
Original Line
Suggested Line
{Comment when necessary}
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18
Rebecca-dono and Couver-sama are returning to Pastillage. {Rebecca-dono~}
Rebecca-dono and Couver-sama are also returning to Pastillage. {Rebecca-dono~}
{~mo ~mo construction. Just like the others, they too, are going home}

19
Oh, don't be sad. It's not like this is farewell. You'll see each other soon enough!
Oh, don't act as if this is farewell. You'll see each other soon enough!
{I don't like how one sentence is spliced into two here.}

21
But there were so many other things I wanted to talk with her about.
But there are so many other things I want to talk with her about.
{present tense}

24
As for Cinque, Eclair, and Noir...
As for Cinque, Éclair, and Noir...
{if you deem accents necessary, do change all the other occasions too then.}

25
...they're with me at a summer training camp near Fuugetsu lodge!
...they're with me at a summer training camp near Fuugetsu Temple!
{consistency}

{there's a "Heeeey!" after this line, sure it doesn't have to be subtitled?}

{title: Biscotti Training Camp!}

41
Well, that was a joke.
Well, jokes aside.
{fits her dialect as well}

43
You can see Pastillage from here!
Pastillage is in sight!
{if you want to shorten the line}

44
Esrnart is the city of class and art, {TLC plzzzzz}situated right at the border of Biscotti.
Close to the border of Biscotti has developed the city of arts and culture, Esnard.
{I hope my grammar is a bit right here}

49
Hero-sama!{ people on the street shouting yuusha sama~}
Nanami-sama!{ people on the street shouting yuusha sama~}
(sorry, they're really shouting nanami-sama here}

56
Master-sama, shall we have lunch soon?
Master, shall we have lunch soon?
{oyakatasama is an expression on itself, being "master". Master-sama would not make sense, actually.}

59
Yes.
Go ahead.
{I'd prefer a liberal tl here. saying yes sounds awkward here}

69
You really are amazing, Yuki.
You really are amazing, Yukki.
{she has 2 nicknames: Yukki, or Yuki + suffix (yuki-chan or yuki-sama, etc.)}

79
Ah, I get it already
Ah, I get it already.
{punctuation}

84
I guess it's my Galette soul. {she says Galette tamashi~ galette soul~ feel free to edit it~}
{an alternative here could be the Galette's spirit"}

88
Okay.
Okay!
{they scream this}

109
You bitch! Enough of this!{super ecchi enough fanservice~}
You...! Enough of this!{super ecchi enough fanservice~}
{I'd omit the bitch part, I can't see her having this personality. she cuts off the cussing word as well, so I'd leave it as this}

121
All right then. Shall we start?
All right then, back to where we were.
{as in, disregard the last scene, it's time for rest}

129
{again, accent aigu (acute) on génoise}

130
We decided that Lady D'Arquien and I shall assist her with that.
We decided that Lady d'Arquien and I shall assist her with that.
{the d must be small. due to conjunction between vowels, "de + Arquien" becomes d'Arquien. "de" means "of" in French. }

132
In Galette, they do not have a counter monster specialist unit like our onmitsu unit.
In Galette, they do not have a anti-monster specialist unit like our covert squad.
{using consistent terms}

133
Leo-sama and Gaul-sama offered that I try to put one up.
I asked Leo-sama and Gaul-sama if I could put one up.
{the subject and object are reversed}

142
Gaul is a matter of fact, but I still wantt to play and fight with you three from Genoise again.
Gaul is a matter of fact, but I still want to play and fight with you three from Genoise again.
{typo}

156
Oh, Eclair a new skill. {obtained? has?}
Woah, Eclair's new skill! {obtained? has?}
{I'd keep it simple like this}

158
Don't you think it would be better if you actually took this seriously?
As a helping hand in the lifeguard training afterwards,

159
Let's see how well you can do while unconscious.
I think I'd rather have you unconscious for a while.
{she'd make use of her in the lifeguard training, so to say.}

164
Bright power gear, Seven tails!
Bright power gear, Seven Tails!
{names have to be capitalized}

167
Bright ice blade!
Bright Ice Blade!

168
Light Fang vortex!
Light Fang Vortex!

169
Seven tail squeeze! {she said this line in english~}
Seven Tail Squeeze! {she said this line in english~}

173
Here we go.{yoishoto~ a sound for doing something again}
Heave-ho. 
{yoishotto is actually used when putting effort in doing something. Similar here to the english cry, heave-ho}

190
My sister is my sister, and those three idiots are something like a family to me.{tl note he uses ane we a form of big sister in japanese}
{the correct spelling is aneue (姉上), which literally means the upper sister (in rank and respect)}

192
Ok, I won't touch you any more, so come down already.
OK, I won't touch you any more, so come down already.

211
Is it appropriate for our ruler to act like this, Violet? {Is it OK, Violet, for a ruler to be like this?}
Is it appropriate for our ruler to act like this, Violle? {Is it OK, Violet, for a ruler to be like this?}
{consistency}

215
This is Pastillage's crystal magic research mecca!
This is Pastillage's crystal magic research's Mecca! {or This is the Mecca of Pastillage's crystal magic research!}
{Mecca houses that big black cube (kaäba), which makes it the holy land for the Islam. A liberal TL for "holy land"}

216
This is the main hall of the Esrnart crystal magic research institute.{i hate the couver accent~} {TLC on the esrnart thing plzzz}
This is the main hall of the Esnard's crystal magic research institute.{i hate the couver accent~} 
{there's no official spelling of that city name}

226
When the afternoon comes, we shall receive sword lessons from lady D'arquine.
When the afternoon comes, we shall receive sword lessons from Lady d'Arquien.
{see above}

233
Well, I would confess to D'Arquien, to the princess, to Rico-kun...
Well, I would confess to d'Arquien, the Princess and Rico...
{fixed it up}

239
I was being strangled in my sleep by Yuki. It hurt so much that I woke up.
I was being strangled in my sleep by Yukki. It hurt so much that I woke up.

240
Yuki has a habit of hugging people in her sleep. {BE spellcheck until line 263 completed}
Yukki has a habit of hugging people in her sleep. {BE spellcheck until line 263 completed}

243
Anyway, you sleep by my side.
You slept next to me anyhow.
{changed the context and the tense}

259
I just remembered! Hero, come here for a second
I just remembered! Hero, come here for a second.

261
You wanted me to pat you before, right?
You patted me before, remember?
{he actually did, refer to season 1. My translation makes sense according to line 264}

262
I didn't pat you then.
It just came to me I didn't pat you then.
{the sentence is originally a bit longer.}

283
We have just arrived.
We have just returned.
{sounds better in context and literal translation (modoru: to come back, to return)}

291
{add caps}

305
Next episode:
See you again next time!